Thursday, October 27, 2011
Rough Draft Peer Review
My writing was reviewed by two people,and their ideas helped me a lot. It is very difficult for me to discover my own mistakes, but Mariah and Abdirizak gave me their point of view to improve my paper. Mariah brought to my attention that I need to edit my paper because there are some words that I did not use correctly. Also, Abdirizak suggested me to add some transitions in order to understand the connection between the last two paragraphs. Using the feedback from my two classmates, I am really sure that my final writing will be much better. Thanks.
Wednesday, October 19, 2011
Rough Draft 1
Maria Barrera
Professor Knapp
English 1B (Friday)
Identity
Every one has the right to establish their identity. Some people believe that their lives are based on their culture and others have shaped their lives because they were affected for external conflicts. The memoir of Marjane Satrapi growing up in Iran is written as a very personal account in the comic book Persepolis. This is a story that describes her life during the Islamic Revolution which includes her moral, physical, religious, and psychological struggles she endured. Being the setting of a bloody war with Iraq, Iran was not the ideal environment Marjane’s parents wanted her to grow up in. Persepolis represents a unique life of a child in Tehran, Iran and the actions she took in order to survive the political upheaval her country was facing. Marjane Satrapi is of great importance in teaching us how some young people are affected for external conflicts and based on this they consider rebellion a way to establish identity.
Some people have changed because some external changes have affected their lives. Many years ago I experienced a big change when my parents decided to come to the United States. At that time I was very religious, and I had a huge faith on God. However, my loneliness made me start thinking that I was by myself, and my beliefs could not help me at all. This situation that I lived in the past helped me to understand Marjane’s rejection of God. Being a little girl Marjane “wanted to be justice, love and the wrath of God all in one,(9)” but later she was affected by her uncle’s death and her unshakable faith disappeared. Anoosh, Marjane’s uncle, was very important for her because she saw him as her hero. Also, Marjane had a great connection with her uncle, and she was pleased and interested on Anoosh’s stories. One day Marjane was waiting for her uncle at school, but he never arrived there because he was arrested. Marjane went to visit her uncle in prison, and that was the last meeting that Marjane had with her beloved Anoosh. After Anoosh was executed, Marjane was disappointed of God and she decided to get him out of her life (70). We, as human beings, have the need to believe in a supernatural force called God, but the experience of loneliness and death can change our way of thinking.
Another big change that affected Marjane was in 1979 when the Revolution took place in Iran and the women were required by fear of punishment, to wear a veil that only leaves her face uncovered. Some women considered to wear a veil as an insult to women’s rights. Marjane sough to fight against the veil the different ways women around her represented how much they protested wearing it. “You showed your opposition to the Regime by letting a few strands of hair show “(75). The women fighting against the veil do not feel it is necessary to cover up to gain respect. Marjane was influenced by the trends in the media and lost her self respect and identity when separated from the veil and her culture. Marjane declared, “I really did not what to think about the veil, deep down I was very religious but as a family we were very modern “(6). Marjane felt disconnect between her religious views and the theocratic policy. Consequently, she showed her rebelliousness playing with the veil instead of wearing it. Similarly, Maysan Haydar confessed, “I have been covering my hair as is prescribed for Muslim women, since I was twelve years old. And while there are many good reasons for doing so, I was not motivated by a desire to be different” (Haydar 413). As a little child Haydar was forced to wear the veil because of her parents’ religious. Also, she admits that she decided to use the veil because of the rewards that she received instead of the religious responsibility. Some teenagers do not have the freedom of wearing what they want. As a result, they can lose their identity and adopt a rebel behavior.
Rebelliousness is not an act that comes by itself, most of the time there is something that provokes it. Marjane was trying to live her life in a normal way during a dangerous period of time, so she was happily shopping with her friend. When Marjane heard the sound of a bomb, she instantly turned back to the reality: war. The explosion of the bomb brought to Marjane the horrible scene of Neda’s death. While Marjane and her mother were walking in front of the Baba-levy’s house, Marjane saw, under the debris, a turquoise bracelet that was attached to Neda’s hand. When Neda Baba-Levys died, Marjane felt anger and sad. After this, the rebel Marjane became a fourteen-years-old teenager that was brave and nothing scared her (143). For this reason, Marjane shouted louder than anybody else, and she was expelled from school after hitting the principal. I could understand this aspect of the novel because I have a rebel mother. My mother’s rebellion was caused by the change that she suffered after losing her mother. Marjane and my mother acted rebelliously because both lost an adored person. In my mother’s case, she could go to school and become a teacher as she wanted. In Marjane’s case, she has experienced some external changes that have shaped her life. As a result, Marjane became involved and matured a lot sooner by supporting her beliefs.
Work Citation
Satrapi, Marjane,Persepolis. New York: Pantheon Books, 2004.Print.
Hayder, Maysan.(n.d.) “Veiled Intentions: Don’t Judge a Muslim Girl by Her Covering.” 403. Print.
Professor Knapp
English 1B (Friday)
Identity
Every one has the right to establish their identity. Some people believe that their lives are based on their culture and others have shaped their lives because they were affected for external conflicts. The memoir of Marjane Satrapi growing up in Iran is written as a very personal account in the comic book Persepolis. This is a story that describes her life during the Islamic Revolution which includes her moral, physical, religious, and psychological struggles she endured. Being the setting of a bloody war with Iraq, Iran was not the ideal environment Marjane’s parents wanted her to grow up in. Persepolis represents a unique life of a child in Tehran, Iran and the actions she took in order to survive the political upheaval her country was facing. Marjane Satrapi is of great importance in teaching us how some young people are affected for external conflicts and based on this they consider rebellion a way to establish identity.
Some people have changed because some external changes have affected their lives. Many years ago I experienced a big change when my parents decided to come to the United States. At that time I was very religious, and I had a huge faith on God. However, my loneliness made me start thinking that I was by myself, and my beliefs could not help me at all. This situation that I lived in the past helped me to understand Marjane’s rejection of God. Being a little girl Marjane “wanted to be justice, love and the wrath of God all in one,(9)” but later she was affected by her uncle’s death and her unshakable faith disappeared. Anoosh, Marjane’s uncle, was very important for her because she saw him as her hero. Also, Marjane had a great connection with her uncle, and she was pleased and interested on Anoosh’s stories. One day Marjane was waiting for her uncle at school, but he never arrived there because he was arrested. Marjane went to visit her uncle in prison, and that was the last meeting that Marjane had with her beloved Anoosh. After Anoosh was executed, Marjane was disappointed of God and she decided to get him out of her life (70). We, as human beings, have the need to believe in a supernatural force called God, but the experience of loneliness and death can change our way of thinking.
Another big change that affected Marjane was in 1979 when the Revolution took place in Iran and the women were required by fear of punishment, to wear a veil that only leaves her face uncovered. Some women considered to wear a veil as an insult to women’s rights. Marjane sough to fight against the veil the different ways women around her represented how much they protested wearing it. “You showed your opposition to the Regime by letting a few strands of hair show “(75). The women fighting against the veil do not feel it is necessary to cover up to gain respect. Marjane was influenced by the trends in the media and lost her self respect and identity when separated from the veil and her culture. Marjane declared, “I really did not what to think about the veil, deep down I was very religious but as a family we were very modern “(6). Marjane felt disconnect between her religious views and the theocratic policy. Consequently, she showed her rebelliousness playing with the veil instead of wearing it. Similarly, Maysan Haydar confessed, “I have been covering my hair as is prescribed for Muslim women, since I was twelve years old. And while there are many good reasons for doing so, I was not motivated by a desire to be different” (Haydar 413). As a little child Haydar was forced to wear the veil because of her parents’ religious. Also, she admits that she decided to use the veil because of the rewards that she received instead of the religious responsibility. Some teenagers do not have the freedom of wearing what they want. As a result, they can lose their identity and adopt a rebel behavior.
Rebelliousness is not an act that comes by itself, most of the time there is something that provokes it. Marjane was trying to live her life in a normal way during a dangerous period of time, so she was happily shopping with her friend. When Marjane heard the sound of a bomb, she instantly turned back to the reality: war. The explosion of the bomb brought to Marjane the horrible scene of Neda’s death. While Marjane and her mother were walking in front of the Baba-levy’s house, Marjane saw, under the debris, a turquoise bracelet that was attached to Neda’s hand. When Neda Baba-Levys died, Marjane felt anger and sad. After this, the rebel Marjane became a fourteen-years-old teenager that was brave and nothing scared her (143). For this reason, Marjane shouted louder than anybody else, and she was expelled from school after hitting the principal. I could understand this aspect of the novel because I have a rebel mother. My mother’s rebellion was caused by the change that she suffered after losing her mother. Marjane and my mother acted rebelliously because both lost an adored person. In my mother’s case, she could go to school and become a teacher as she wanted. In Marjane’s case, she has experienced some external changes that have shaped her life. As a result, Marjane became involved and matured a lot sooner by supporting her beliefs.
Work Citation
Satrapi, Marjane,Persepolis. New York: Pantheon Books, 2004.Print.
Hayder, Maysan.(n.d.) “Veiled Intentions: Don’t Judge a Muslim Girl by Her Covering.” 403. Print.
Tuesday, October 4, 2011
Week four
Maria Barrera
Professor Knapp
English 1B(Friday)
Week four prompt 2
Some people have changed because some external changes have affected their lives. Many years ago I experienced a big change when my parents decided to come to the United States. At that time I was very religious, and I had a huge faith on God. However, my loneliness made me start thinking that I was by myself, and my beliefs could not help me at all. This situation that I lived in the past helped me to understand Marjane’s rejection of God. Being a little girl Marjane “wanted to be justice, love and the wrath of God all in one," but later she was affected by her uncle’s death and her unshakable faith disappeared (9). Anoosh, Marjane’s uncle, was very important for her because she saw him as her hero. Also, Marjane had a great connection with her uncle, and she was pleased and interested on Anoosh’s stories. One day Marjane was waiting for her uncle at school, but he never arrived there because he was arrested. Marjane went to visit her uncle in prison, and that was the last meeting that Marjane had with her beloved Anoosh. After Anoosh was executed, Marjane was disappointed of God and she decided to get him out of her life (70). We, as human beings, have the need to believe in a supernatural force called God, but the experience of loneliness and death can change our way of thinking.
Rebellious is not an act that comes by itself, most of the time there is something that provokes it. Marjane was trying to live her life in a normal way during a dangerous period of time, so she was happily shopping with her friend. When Marjane heard the sound of a bomb, she instantly turned back to the reality: war. The explosion of the bomb brought to Marjane the horrible scene of Neda’s death. While Marjane and her mother were walking in front of the Baba-levy’s house, Marjane saw, under the debris, a turquoise bracelet that was attached to Neda’s hand. When Neda Baba-Levys died, Marjane felt anger and sad. After this, the rebel Marjane became a fourteen-years-old teenager that was brave and nothing scared her (143). For this reason, Marjane shouted louder than anybody else, and she was expelled from school after hitting the principal. I could understand this aspect of the novel because I have a rebel mother. My mother’s rebelliousness was caused by the change that she suffered after losing her mother. Marjane and my mother acted rebelliously because both lost an adored person. In my mother’s case, she could go to school and become a teacher as she wanted. I think that Marjane has experienced some external changes that have shaped her life. As a result, I can predict that Marjane will be a strong woman who will be honest with all people and herself.
Professor Knapp
English 1B(Friday)
Week four prompt 2
Some people have changed because some external changes have affected their lives. Many years ago I experienced a big change when my parents decided to come to the United States. At that time I was very religious, and I had a huge faith on God. However, my loneliness made me start thinking that I was by myself, and my beliefs could not help me at all. This situation that I lived in the past helped me to understand Marjane’s rejection of God. Being a little girl Marjane “wanted to be justice, love and the wrath of God all in one," but later she was affected by her uncle’s death and her unshakable faith disappeared (9). Anoosh, Marjane’s uncle, was very important for her because she saw him as her hero. Also, Marjane had a great connection with her uncle, and she was pleased and interested on Anoosh’s stories. One day Marjane was waiting for her uncle at school, but he never arrived there because he was arrested. Marjane went to visit her uncle in prison, and that was the last meeting that Marjane had with her beloved Anoosh. After Anoosh was executed, Marjane was disappointed of God and she decided to get him out of her life (70). We, as human beings, have the need to believe in a supernatural force called God, but the experience of loneliness and death can change our way of thinking.
Rebellious is not an act that comes by itself, most of the time there is something that provokes it. Marjane was trying to live her life in a normal way during a dangerous period of time, so she was happily shopping with her friend. When Marjane heard the sound of a bomb, she instantly turned back to the reality: war. The explosion of the bomb brought to Marjane the horrible scene of Neda’s death. While Marjane and her mother were walking in front of the Baba-levy’s house, Marjane saw, under the debris, a turquoise bracelet that was attached to Neda’s hand. When Neda Baba-Levys died, Marjane felt anger and sad. After this, the rebel Marjane became a fourteen-years-old teenager that was brave and nothing scared her (143). For this reason, Marjane shouted louder than anybody else, and she was expelled from school after hitting the principal. I could understand this aspect of the novel because I have a rebel mother. My mother’s rebelliousness was caused by the change that she suffered after losing her mother. Marjane and my mother acted rebelliously because both lost an adored person. In my mother’s case, she could go to school and become a teacher as she wanted. I think that Marjane has experienced some external changes that have shaped her life. As a result, I can predict that Marjane will be a strong woman who will be honest with all people and herself.
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