Rough Draft Peer Review

My writing was reviewed by two people,and their ideas helped me a lot. It is very difficult for me to discover my own mistakes, but Mariah and Abdirizak gave me their point of view to improve my paper. Mariah brought to my attention that I need to edit my paper because there are some words that I did not use correctly. Also, Abdirizak suggested me to add some transitions in order to understand the connection between the last two paragraphs. Using the feedback from my two classmates, I am really sure that my final writing will be much better. Thanks.